This is all-too beautiful and eye-catching! I love how the machine looks.
To help you improve, I got some tips: Smoothen out the light reflections on the cylinder shapes of the machine. It will make the texture much more smoother and metallic.
The men that are doming down from the machine needs more detail and the light source needs to be smoothened out on them too. The closest man to be darkened up too, because there is too much light on him. The lighting is like he's near the light, but far away from it. Think, for example, of how the moon shadows the sun during the eclipse. If the moon is further away, the light won't affect it that much. If the moon is nearer, more light will envelope it.
Hopes this will help you out! I did try my best to help.
The composition is actually very good.The only thing I will say is the floating dude is on the same level as the green core light thingy...it would have been better to offset that up or down from that position. It would have created more dynamic tension that way. But the overall lighting is incredible. Probably make the guyhigher that would keep the eye moving around the painting.
this is great. only thing i could think of to improve it would be to add a lil bit of wires on the bottom right and maybe the left coming from the extreme foreground and leading into the mid background to add more depth and to give the light a substance to bounce off of.
Humm, I agree with AndreeWallin, and would in addition to that say that you could maybe add some visible consoles around the room under the screens, and maybe some ppl working on them, aswell as some extra machinery or stuff/cables/misc under the core.
Other than that I have no advice.
Are you going to refine this picture? Maybe even expand it?
The first I looked at the pic, it was thumbnailed...I saw immediately the central green power core and the guy to the right dangling/rappeling from the ceiling.
As thumbnail, my first impression was, "A mech indoors...a mech with a central core on top...with a guy at the right coming down from the ceiling with a rappel rope."
Upon closer inspection, lo and behold I see another guy in the foreground coming down with a rappel rope from the ceiling. So now I kinda start thinking, "A pair of Special Ops infiltrating some sort of facility most likely involved in some sort of power generation, and it is NOT a mech, its a reactor of something."
The foremost Special Op guy, I couldn't see him unless I really really look at him. I think he is in an awkward place in the pic, considering that he is drowned down by the green glowing light of the reactor core.
There is also a module right below the core itself...I think it can be put in a better angle.
And the ceiling panels inbetween the white borders on the ceiling seems a bit off.
Honestly, if I can come up with pics like this today I'd be so happy!
Only thing I could say that you might want to fix if you felt like redoing it is to make the central machine more prominent - the green part bigger, make it more of a central piece. It's a bit squished upward at the moment, and with the men hanging down up there, that makes it pretty busy at the top and lonesome at the bottom.
Which is actually pretty cool. But the green part could be a bit bigger, if you know what I mean.
I think the left figure should be already on the ground, as if he's just landed. Possibly have him looking back over his shoulder. I think that would balance the composition and make a triangle of interest between the two figures and the glowing core. I admire your work and this looks like another great piece.
have that brilliant green energy continue through the centre of its body in a concentrated lazer beam where it hits the floor and flows into a circuitry pattern that covers the entire floor, the glowing circuitry fades to nothing just before it touches the surrounding walls.....
This might indicate that mother is supplying her life force. or that mother is alot bigger and that she is made up of more than one part.
Zu allererst sehr cooler sketch! Die Belichtung und die Atmosphäre sagen mir sehr zu!
*)- auf den ersten Blick erscheint der linke Character größer als er eigentlich sein sollte
*)- mein Blick wird extrem auf den Reaktorkern gezogen, was erstmal von der Richtung her nicht schlecht ist, jedoch ist es momentan ganz schwer auf etwas anderes zu achten. (um genau zu sein auf die Eindringlinge)... hier könnte man den Charakteren selbst ein paar Highlights verpassen.
*)- eine wilde völlig unbegründete Idee: man könnte den Blickwinkel ein wenig steiler und etwas schräger ansetzen um dem Bild mehr Dynamik zu geben und dem Betrachter das Gefühl zu geben selber einer der Eindringlinge zu sein.
add computers around the machine , careful about the 'arms ' around it and the perspective ,and also try moving the 2 characters. They make the compo harder to read in my opinion. Really great sketch !!
i agree with most people that the guy on the left is not amazingly obvious, i'm sure that once you have rendered him he will stand out much more but to be safe you could try bringing him closer to the viewer and so enlarging him, or shifting him a bit to the left. Brilliant concept thus far.
I'd love to know about this! The name, "mother" intrigues me. Is the structure a container for some class of an alien queen bee? Has the man hanging from the rope just discovered it? Is he trying to research it or planning on destroying it? Is he perhaps even a part of this "hive", and is he trying to maintain it?
the guy on the left hanging confused me as I thought at first it was something part of the machine but I am certain once you get this fully finished he will not blend into the machine so much. I love the concept and the coloring thus far.
I'm digging it so far. The colours are great and the concept is cool. If I had to nit pick right now I would say that the guy hanging on the left isn't reading too clearly yet. At first glance I thought he was some kind of arm coming off of the centre piece. Looking forward to see you getting closer to finished with this one.
I like this. I love the perspective angle, the lighting, and how it seems to follow the divine proportion in terms of composition. You'll wanna tighten a few things up no doubt... but for a rough/comp it does it's job well.
This looks amazing both in composition and perspective.
Only thing I think would improve it... might be an angled perspective to get more action and movement into it(if you get what i mean)... But since I don't know what's going on in this piece, I don't know if it would be suitable.
Erstmal - toller Sketch. Die Farben und das Licht sitzen. Ein paar Ideen zur Komposition. *) Den linken Standfuß des Reaktors etwas steiler von links oben nach rechts unten arrangieren und mit ein wenig mehr Tiefe gestalten (etwas mehr wie der rechte Fuß. *) Den gesamten linken Bildrand leicht abdunkeln, damit das Auge im Bild bleibt. *) Den linken, größeren Eindringling würde ich nicht entlang des Reaktorrandes platzieren sondern ungefähr in der Mitte des Reaktors und etwas darüber so dass er halb über der hellen Stelle und halb im dunklen Bereich ist.
I really like it, but I think to help the composition, you should darken the figure that's closer to the camera. It took me a few seconds to realize it was a figure, because of the glow. Also, the tube that is to the left of the said figure, I feel that it should be moved over slightly away from the center, bright area.
Maybe a figure on the bottom left to show more scale, too?
I like the composition and lightning in this one a lot. Have you considered painting a 3rd character to the front, standing in the ground watching at the 2 others, or something? Not sure if that'd be an improvement, just an idea