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People of DA ! please tell me your opinion about this rough concept sketch! ideas how to improve it (compositionally) are very welcome!
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*frecklesmile Apr 5, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I like how you said this is a sketch but in reality it's really a MASTERPIECE!

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~Nortenyo Dec 6, 2010
The composition is actually very good.The only thing I will say is the floating dude is on the same level as the green core light thingy...it would have been better to offset that up or down from that position. It would have created more dynamic tension that way. But the overall lighting is incredible. Probably make the guyhigher that would keep the eye moving around the painting.

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~BhookaBhediya Oct 14, 2010
nice bro
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~Pyrah Nov 9, 2009
To be completely honest, I didn't even see the guy closest to the fourth wall as an actual person until he was pointed out in the critique. Otherwise this is an amazing piece.

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~NuclearD00d Nov 8, 2009
This reminds me of the game, Prototype.

Fancy. As my artistic sense is worse than that of a brick wall.. I've got nothing to add.
Well done though.

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~LordoftheBling-XXL Sep 28, 2009
this is great. only thing i could think of to improve it would be to add a lil bit of wires on the bottom right and maybe the left coming from the extreme foreground and leading into the mid background to add more depth and to give the light a substance to bounce off of.

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~NR-Krusi Sep 24, 2009
Awesome job! I'd make the character on the left closer to the viewer (bigger with more contrast) because it might add more story to the image.
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~ales-kotnik Sep 24, 2009  Student Digital Artist
everything looks goot to me except i would do something with those 2 mans - don't know what (experiment)

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~alexmartinez Sep 24, 2009
very cool concepts, Alex!^^
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*Antaria-Nova Sep 24, 2009
Yes, great work. :)

Humm, I agree with AndreeWallin, and would in addition to that say that you could maybe add some visible consoles around the room under the screens, and maybe some ppl working on them, aswell as some extra machinery or stuff/cables/misc under the core.

Other than that I have no advice.

Are you going to refine this picture? Maybe even expand it?

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